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Auteur: | nielsje [ 25-01-2014, 20:39:20 ] |
Berichtenonderwerp: | Van epische gedichten tot droevige liefdeslyriek (Nielsje |
The Monster Underneath The Green Leaves Once there was a little boy All day long he kept himself busy With playing in the woods behind His parents house. They did not mind, Troubled, as they were, with the lack of money that Was part of there life. How could they ever saw the yellow lurking Eyes underneath the green leaves, following every step the little boy took. But then one day, One dreadful day The little boy walked through the woods without care. He didn’t saw the dark footsteps on the ground. He did’nt hear the leaves making sound Or even felt the yellow lurking eyes. Snitch, Snatch. A dark hand clawed around the boy. Snatch snitch. Away he went on the back Of a big green monster. The monster returned to his home in woods unknown And put the little boy straight to work in his garden of pain. There the little boy had to pick up a cruel fruit from the trees. Pear-shaped fruits were they with a skin sharp as razorblades. The boy cried and wept and his hands were covered with blood. But the monster didn’t mind. He laughed in a horrible way. This torture went on for several days. Every day the boy picked up the sharp fruits , while the monster laughed with his misery. But soon enough the monster would taste the bitterness of revenge. One night while the monster dreamt of screams and painful torture. The boy left his open cage, silently moving towards the sleeping beast. Out of his pocket he took a sharp fruit and smashed it in his hideous face. With a loud and painful roar the monster awoke. The pain and blood in his eyes blinded him dreadfully . Like a mad man he sprung up and fell into the great fireplace where the flames feasted on his greenish flesh. Finally the hurt was over. Victorious the little boy laughed and danced the whole night long. And as he did he stumbled onto a casket full of gold and marble jewels. The boy took a great sack and carried the treasure out of the grim house, out of the darkened woods. How joyous were his parents when they saw their son back. Not only they had back there beloved child, The treasure the little boy had brought Ended the life of misery they had known. From then on Dame Fortune did only but smile upon them. So came the dreadful beast to his end, And if you doubt if this all truly happened. Go then to the forest and ask the trees what ever happened to the monster underneath the green Leaves. |
Auteur: | Tom [ 25-01-2014, 20:56:37 ] |
Berichtenonderwerp: | Re: Van epische gedichten tot droevige liefdeslyriek (Nielsj |
Ik vind het een cool verhaal Schrijf je wel eens horror? Saw is verleden tijd trouwens. Er zijn wel wat foutjes maar het is stukken beter dan de meesten hier dus ik ga verder niet verbeteren Ga zo door |
Auteur: | nielsje [ 25-01-2014, 21:11:59 ] |
Berichtenonderwerp: | Re: Van epische gedichten tot droevige liefdeslyriek (Nielsj |
Dankje Tom, Sorry voor de taalfoutjes. Ik durf bij het nalezen nogal weinig aandacht te besteden aan spelling en grammatica. Ik zal proberen om er in het vervolg een beetje waakzamer over te zijn . Inderdaad, ik schrijf af en toe wel eens horror. As a matter of fact is er eind vorige maand een kortverhaal, De Gouden Kus van mij gepubliceerd in het kleine magazine: SF Terra. Dat verhaal was een soort van vampierverhaal maar niet zo'n melig Twilight- verhaal. Mijn verhaal was toch ietsjes beter . |
Auteur: | Man in black [ 26-01-2014, 00:07:16 ] |
Berichtenonderwerp: | Re: Van epische gedichten tot droevige liefdeslyriek (Nielsj |
Wel origineel, maar vind de zinnen eigenlijk niet zo lekker lopen |
Auteur: | nielsje [ 26-01-2014, 10:59:25 ] |
Berichtenonderwerp: | Re: Van epische gedichten tot droevige liefdeslyriek (Nielsj |
Ach, ieder zijn eigen stijl maar toch bedankt voor het halve compliment Man In Black . |
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